Friday, 7 July 2017


The Midnight Spirit

The Monster-Paragraph 1
Thump! As Jack and Jill walked to school they heard something strange. It was very scary. When they entered the school, the door creaked close as if someone was there. Jack and Jill got really scared and ran to their classroom as fast as they could. After a long day at school they were walking  home and praying the noise would be gone but then Thump! the sound was there again, they ran super fast like a cheetah. When they got home they were making their costume for Halloween because tomorrow  was Halloween and they were very excited.

It was Friday 10:00am in the morning and they were walking to school. But as they walked they heard the sound. Suddenly a loud Thump! Filled their ears. But this time they didn't run away  they  went to go Investigate and what they found was a monster living in a old cabin around dead animals.

When the school teacher called out the roll Jack and Jill did not respond, so they called the police to find them.They were found where the monster lived so they shut it down and  it was banded to enter.

Meanwhile they left  and went home and worked on there costume. Then at 11:59am they started to get ready for Halloween it was nearly Midnight and they were looking forward to seeing the monster again.

The founded Spirit-Paragraph 2
“Come on hurry up” Jack’s Dad shouted. They went to the basement to find some old buckets for their candy. When they were in the basement they felt something strange, there was a devil spirit and he was looking in the basement. First they went to go get mom and dad to help but when the devil saw everyone he ran to a Swap. The spirit went to the Swap because that was where the he lived and they asked him if he knew  the monster and he said yes he had wanted to catch him for years.

He told them a story,  he said there was an army and he and the monster were in it anyone could join. They were best friend but then one day he tried to kill him so then the spirit escape.

The Dead Monster and the Candy-Paragraph 3
Then they set up a plan each person will kill him so like if devil is low then Jack comes in a tries to kill the monster. Then they battled the monster the devil was very strong so they were happy  because the monster was getting weak so they kept on trying then a huge strike from Mom and Dad killed him because they could see that the spirit was a little low.

But then he stood up tall and mighty. The spirit had used all his special power but when he trying to kill the monster there was not enough powers left. So he ran away back to his swap. Mum and dad said ”I think we should go” But Jill and Jack said “No” Jack was very confused and he didn’t know what he had to do. So all he could think of was sacrifice for his family. The monster picked up his sword and killed Jack. Jill was terrified and her tears came down her neck then Jill wiped away her tears and she got so angry that she took the sword of her mother and putted the sword through his chest and killed him and then he died. Then something strange was happening something was coming out of the monster it was Jack soul and then it went in to Jack’s heart and then  Jack came alive.Then Jill hugged him and just in time it was midnight was over.Then they went and knocked on to people's doors for candy they had a lot and then they went home.All the screams of joy filled there room and they stuffed the yummy delicious chocolate in there mouths then Jacks says i am going to get something it was the Monsters sword and he said”What should we do about it”Then Jill added”We give it to the spirit because he helped us”Then the next day on there way to school mum and dad dropped off  Jack and Jill then first they went to the swap near the monsters old cabin it was far away from their school a little. And then they gave  the spirit the sword.

What i learnt was how to write a narrative.I learnt this by doing this task.What we had to do was write a narrative that was the topic Jack and Jill then we had to use our plan to help us with our story.Then we had to draw pictures to make our story fun.


  1. Hi Angela

    I love your story keep it up.

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